Dear, Abraham Lincoln
The war mast end soon .to many of our American men are dying. So many families have lost love ones. All the gun shoots and blood everywhere can drive a man crazy. I know we all are at war but it has to end. The U.S. was made to be one but it doesn’t look like we are by the looks of this. Gettysburg is the most bloodies I have seen in my life. Bodies just everywhere families shooting at each other. Love ones in families are dying missing out of life .this just has to end because we are not one anymore.
Your friend, the woods
The war mast end soon .to many of our American men are dying. So many families have lost love ones. All the gun shoots and blood everywhere can drive a man crazy. I know we all are at war but it has to end. The U.S. was made to be one but it doesn’t look like we are by the looks of this. Gettysburg is the most bloodies I have seen in my life. Bodies just everywhere families shooting at each other. Love ones in families are dying missing out of life .this just has to end because we are not one anymore.
Your friend, the woods
Ok. You are on the right track and your writing is persuasive, but this needs some more evidence of what happened at the battle of Gettysburg, and it is too short.
ReplyDeleteAs is 21/30 points for this one.
Please edit for more points.